Coffee commands
by Sophie Petit
Four men with gray hair sit in Starbucks – three read the Sunday New York Times, six dollars at the counter. The other holds a small, brown book with no title or picture on the cover. He sits, holding the book, then stands and tells his reading neighbor to “have a good one” and leaves.
A younger-looking man walks in and up to the counter, orders a soy no foam and I think “Soy what?” But the barista knows, and that’s what matters. He tells the barista, after receiving his drink, “Thanks. Take it easy.” Everyone wanting everyone to have good ones and take it easy.
A gaggle of young patrons enter. The fat one is quiet. The blond is obnoxious. He says loudly, “I hope there are security cameras in here,” and complains about the location of the trashcan. A girl tells him lightly, “Chill out,” and I think about what if instead, after receiving our coffees, we told the baristas, “Hey, thanks. Chill out.” It wouldn’t have the same benign effect as “take it easy.”
The barista says something to the gaggle, and they all laugh, including the adult leader. They laugh loudly and together, they really laugh, enjoying this involuntary expression of pleasure, and they like him, this barista. He made their coffees exactly how they like them and they only had to give him sixteen dollars and he said something funny and a bit flattering to no one in particular so there is no jealousy and they really laughed, and for a moment an eight-hour drive back to Cincinnati doesn’t seem so bad.

Beautiful and poetically written post! You had me hooked from the first sentence. A well-deserved FP! Take it easy
Indeed.
This is so simple, yet brilliant. Those moments of recognized kindness and calmness are ethereal and such a potent reminder that we’re all connected.
This was delightful to read
You paint an interesting picture here. Well done!
Love it! It’s good to see some short stories getting some love on Freshly Pressed!
This was so interesting to read. Loved this piece, can’t wait for more.
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Beautifully written! Captivating, witty, and genuine all at once!
Adieu, scribbler
it’s really nice to see that this was freshly pressed and i love the way you write. i wrote an odd little piece on coffee too, if you’re ever in the mood…and hopefully not in your car: http://sweetmotherlover.wordpress.com/2012/08/31/coffee-a-love-story/
and congrats on the fp. well deserved. all the best, sweet mo
Love your style…enjoyed this little story thanks to finding you on freshly pressed.
I can relate. Thank you for the moment.
I’m sure it’s a mistake, it’s not sixteen dollars, is it? But even six dollars for a coffee, wow! We’re still paying three dollars fifty cents for ours.
I could visualise that place and those people. There’s at least one of them infiltrating everyone’s favourite quiet place which is why we can relate to it. Good piece.
loved it
Really good read. Thanks for posting.
This is awesome. I’m in love with this post basically. So, hey, thanks. Chill out.
Very nice. I always enjoy stories of observation. Thanks for it!
very good
This was such an erratic enigmatic work that I had to love it. I don’t think I’ve ever come across anything quite like it.
I’m wondering if this “event” lightened your mood or if you were glad to leave the somewhat shallow place and head to Cincinnati… it’s nicely written either way.
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Beautiful …
like it chill out
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You got the mad skills with your writing craft. Nice job. And congrats on the FP! It’s nice to see these kind of narrative posts getting attention.
Smashing – you hooked me in – very very good – A
This was fun to read- I will be back to read more.
Feels like real life. How perceptive, I thoroughly enjoyed this.
You took an everyday situation and turned into something that drew us in. Very well done.
if i was getting that much for coffee i would be laughing a lot too
I read this, and liked it; so I read all your posts. To find beauty and thoughtful writing and honesty – what happiness! I thank you!!
Well written, interesting story. Terrific. Congratulations on FP!
Wonderfully written and as a former Starbucks “barista” I can very much envision the scene. Some Starbucks observations of my own: http://wp.me/p2AWbs-B
Excellent post. I enjoyed this very much. I felt it was from the perspective of a single patron/you as well, stopping in for a break while traveling. The various groups seemed to all be coming and going as you observed.
Marymtf- Sixteen dollars for a small group and $6 for specialty coffee is typical for our Starbucks as well.
Lovely, I felt like I was having a coffee with you. Thanks.
this is great!
“Everyone wanting everyone to have good ones and take it easy.”
brilliant piece. thanks for sharing
beautifully written